It was that time in the spring when the first slivers of snow began to dissolve and the sun rays reached out through the cold airs of the winter. In Central Park, the leaves were still missing from all the trees but the dirty globs of ice were still frozen to the curbs of Colombus Circle. Within the naked trees, stood a different tree. Perhaps its limbs were more curvy? The last leaves a more lush green? It was merely an Oak, but this tree stood alone amongst it’s plain brown companions. But, laying deep beneath the tree was something the New Yorkers could not see. There lay a Dryad- from centuries ago, an aged Greek tale. A young nymph, with perfect rounded locks and a porcelain face wrapped in a satin ice blue scarf. She lived her life, listening to the conversations within Central Park. She knew why Christina decided to break up with Seth, how Regina and Adam fell for each other, and even what happened between Lauren and her mom that ended their friendship forever. One time, a bird specialist lead a tour through her neighborhood, and she learned of robin’s eggs, pheasants’ mating calls, and that one sparrowhawk sighting of 1984. She soaked up the information like a sponge, as a mosquito savors its blood. For this was all she lived for, and all she could do, since the Oak was her prisoning home. She could understand the words of animals in the park- it was her special gift. She knew all about territorial disputes and mating drama which sometimes unraveled into a quite comedial entertainment. However, there was a sadness within her, that she could not leave the Oak. She would always remain the listener, the therapist, the boring one with no story of her own. She dreamed of herself meeting “the one”, owning that tiny white dog, and going to brunch at Sarabeth’s. A true tragedy, she felt, one she could not escape. A longing “nobody”, understood by all.
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ReplyDeleteThis was so great! I can't explain how gripped I was while I was reading this. Everything felt so real and so alive as I was reading it. Your use of language created a beautiful story-like feel to this entry. I especially like how you described the oak as her "prisoning home", it was a very powerful line because it creates a stark contrast between the two seemingly opposite words that you joined together. Since this has a more mystical feel, i would maybe change some of the more mundane words like "therapist" or "bird specialist" ,for example, to something that goes better with the overall tone of the poem. Excellent job!!
I love how this poem connects the current time period with the past through the Dryad. The modern depiction of Central Park and New Yorkers shows the readers that this aged Greek nymph has been trapped in the oak for centuries. I like how you bring in specific names and life situations, such as "Christina decided to break up with Seth", as it makes the tone of the poem all the more genuine. I think "a mosquito savors its blood" was a really great simile to use for the Dryad soaking up information. The only thing I would change is the tense of poem from past to present, to make it feel like the Dryad still exists in the same oak even today.
ReplyDeleteWow, nice work on this one. I have a lot to say about it, so I would like to use this for workshop next class. I will be sharing a lot of thoughts and ideas about this then, but for now, I want to compliment you on your ability to blend myth and reality, past and present, in a convincing form that does justice to the story of the dryads. I'm looking forward to discussing this soon!
ReplyDeleteI wasn't able to fit this one in for Tuesday's class, but I hope to do it on Thursday.
DeleteThis poem is fantastic! I was really drawn into the details and description that you portrayed. The inner rhyme and music was also great. It was really cool how you brought the past and the present together. Overall most of the poem flowed. However when I got to the very modern names of Seth and Regina and the mentioning of the bird specialist I was shaken from the trance this poem set me in.
ReplyDeleteI agree that the character's names are a little modern (and Regina instantly makes me think of Regina George from Mean Girls). I would use more generic names, perhaps. I really like the image that accompanies the poem.
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