Images of broken light
dance before me like a million eyes
Possessing and caressing me
Waves of joy drift through my open mind
inciting and inviting
Sounds of laughter, shades of life,
the smiles returning to the faces
I'd like to be
With lovers and friends
In our little hideaway beneath the waves
No hell below us
Above us only sky
We would be warm below the storm
Limitless undying love which
shines around me like a million suns
Cellophane flowers of yellow and green
There's nowhere you can be that isn't
where you're meant to be.
Imagine no heaven
no countries and no possessions
no religion too
And our friends are all on board
Everyone of us (Everyone of us) has all we need
You may say I'm a dreamer
But I'm not the only one
Take these sunken eyes and learn to see
Across the Universe.
All You Need is Love.
Imagine.
Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds.
an Octopus's garden.
a yellow submarine.
You may say I'm a dreamer,
Guess you know it’s true. But
There's nothing you can know that isn't known
Nothing you can see that isn't shown
This was such an original, inspiring cut-up poem! I love the sense of movement that you established in the first stanze, with lines like "dance before me", "caressing and possessing", "waves of joy drift", and "inciting and inviting." I think these lines really make the images come to life.I also think the last stanza with all the song lyrics creates a very strong ending for the poem. You performed your poem in a clear, meaningful tone so props for being way less awkward than me! The only thing I don't understand is why (everyone of us) is in parentheses, but maybe I'm missing something. Other than that, this is awesome.
ReplyDeleteThis poem was so much fun to read! I really enjoyed the different verses that the speaker used from the Beatles's songs. The speaker's performance was also well done. I don't really know what the poem is about. Is it about friendship? love? peace?
ReplyDeleteThis poem was so much fun to read! I really enjoyed the different verses that the speaker used from the Beatles's songs. The speaker's performance was also well done. I don't really know what the poem is about. Is it about friendship? love? peace?
ReplyDeleteI love how you took other poetry and used it to make your own very original and fun poem. The order you chose to put the lyrics in allows the poem to tell a story, and really flows well. Great job performing it too!
ReplyDeleteHey! This was an extremely creative way to do a cut up poem, taking lines from all the different Beatles songs. You did a great job of choosing similar lines, and creating them into a beautiful poem. I like that you bolded the last two lines, adds emphasis to them.
ReplyDeleteAlthough I really enjoyed it, I was unsure what the actual message of the poem is, so you might want to rearrange some of the lines to maybe make this more clear.
Great video-moving!
Hey! This was an extremely creative way to do a cut up poem, taking lines from all the different Beatles songs. You did a great job of choosing similar lines, and creating them into a beautiful poem. I like that you bolded the last two lines, adds emphasis to them.
ReplyDeleteAlthough I really enjoyed it, I was unsure what the actual message of the poem is, so you might want to rearrange some of the lines to maybe make this more clear.
Great video-moving!
I thought you did a great job combining different Beatles lyrics and song titles together to make a beautiful sounding poem. I thought the stanzas after the first one did a better job using vivid details and avoiding abstractions. The reading was clear and impactful, and an appropriate voice was used to convey the meaning in the poem.
ReplyDeleteI love love love this poem, it is so creative! You did a great job with performing this poem with a rhythm that shows how inspiring this poem is. You did a great job of putting all the classic Beatles songs into one poem. I had a hard time understanding the actual message of the poem and if the last two lines are in bold because they depict the main message, you should make that more clear. Overall, really great job with this poem!!
ReplyDeleteI really love the musicality of this cut up poem, both in its references to music and in the was it sounds together. I think that the line at the end "imagine..." Sounded different how you read it than how I would read it on the page. I would make the two more consistent by maybe putting a colon after the word imagine, instead of a period and capitalizing each of the tree lines that follow it.
ReplyDeletei think it was so creative even without making it a video but even better with the video.
ReplyDeleteI loved how you incorporated so many phrases from the Beatles and incorporating them naturally in the poem. I think that is a great way to relate to a large population and really get them into the poem.
I think maybe just try to use less abstractions or common phrases such as ""smiles returning to the faces"
love it love it love it